What is wrong with explanations of evolution

I think explanations of evolution usually don't get very far because issues are skipped over or are discussed in the wrong order. I would begin an explanation of evolution like this:

I don't want to die.

But my grandparents died, and I accept that they no longer exist. I think they are in the state they were in before they were born; that is to say, nothing.

Human consciousness requires a normally functioning brain. That is why a series of small strokes can produce such devastating changes to perception and personality. If your consciousness exists independently of your physical body, why are strokes even noticeable?

I wish everyone could exist for as long as they liked and were as happy as they liked.
But this world is not like that, and stories about the afterlife are made up. None of the stories about the afterlife and how to get there agree because each story is made up by a different group to assure themselves that they alone will not die (and, have you noticed, so that people will willingly give money).

You will be shocked to learn how many of the story elements (the crucifixion, rebirth, and many, many more) from the New Testament are copied from Egyptian and Indian literature. Not only that, but the priests learn about this in seminary, but never mention it in public. Ask someone who has been through seminary.

Recently, some evolution advocates have received death threats from creationists. I understand why this happens. Acceptance of evolution is a death threat to anyone who thinks that if evolution is true, it means there is no afterlife.

Some religious people accept that evolution is an established fact, but for many others, the implication that they are going to die and that there is no afterlife is simply overwhelming. Discussing how evolution works before that issue is addressed is simply a waste of time.

Evolution happens before our eyes: bacteria become resistant to antibiotics, insects become resistant to pesticides.

About 8 percent of our DNA is made up of viruses that infected our ancestors over millions of years. About 80% of human conceptions spontaneously abort after a few days because there are serious DNA errors in the fertilized egg.

Prayer produces no effect in controlled experiments (although it might make people feel better). The universe is billions of years old, the Earth orbits the Sun, the Sun is a star in the Milky Way Galaxy, the galaxies are moving apart at very high speed, the galaxies are distributed around huge voids... none of these things is mentioned in texts from the ancients. Why? Because they did not know.